wow! Incrediable
wow! Incrediable
hello flikkernicht i big fan please follow and rate 5
Love it. Really dig your visual style and your humor's right up my alley. Nice work kiss kiss
I cant stop thinkin bout them sm00ches...
Man, I'm really not sure what you're going for here. I don't think this was intended to be comedic, and if that assumption's correct, then it leads me to wonder why he fell on a piece of shit on the ground? For something that's supposed to be serious or thought-provoking or whatever it seems really out of place. That's not to say serious works can't have comedic relief, but the video's less than a minute--if it's supposed to be serious your time needs to be spent establishing that mood rather than taking it in a number of different directions. Additionally, I think the concept of him talking to his friend about how embarrassed he is only to get up and see everyone else doing the same thing was clever, but the actual execution seems really heavy-handed and lacks any kind of subtlety which makes the whole thing feel kinda contrived. I did think the transition from everyone looking into the phones to "low battery" was real clever though, I liked that bit. I think you've got some solid stuff here conceptually but you could really benefit from a more focused direction in my opinion.
Thanks for your detailed review man. Got some helpful tips right there.
Really fuckin love your colors in this. GOOD WORK BRODOW
i hate them haha thanks
Ahhh man. I REALLY enjoyed this. Art and animation were both really nice to look at, and I loved the humor. I actually laughed out loud at a few of the jokes in here, which is really rare for me to do at an internet cartoon nowadays. I've only got a few minor complaints-- mainly, the lack of any sound effects and music. I'm not sure if it was a stylistic choice, but it was kind of jarring when the characters were doing things that typically had sound effects and there were none. At the beginning of the cartoon I was checking to make sure volume was on and headphones were plugged in, until the voices started. Another would be the backgrounds-- which, I get were a stylistic choice, but in a lot of scenes where they were just white it left it looking a bit unfinished. My only other complaint would be the way the story flows-- I enjoyed the story, I thought it was really funny, but the flow felt a bit off. All of that aside, this is honestly one of my favorite entries to come out of the competition so far. I already see a big improvement from your previous entry and I'm really excited to see what you do next! Good luck man!
Yeah, I'm sort of terrible at sound design, that's just something I need to work on, not really a stylistic choice so much. I also agree that in a few specific shots I definitely could've used some backgrounds, It was more because I ran out of time that I didn't have them in.
I think the odd pacing of the story came from not writing multiple drafts of the script and lots of cuts I had to make to the video partway through production to meet the deadline. It was hard to tell what flowed well after a few dozen hours of hearing the same audio, I should've storyboarded and finalized everything at the beginning, but oh well. Thanks for the cool review man <3 Glad you liked it
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First off, love the art style. Animation was solid and you've got a really good concept of which colors to use. A lot of the shots used were really cool too, and I don't see a lot of animators that try to execute them-- specifically the one with Amy on the balcony, that one stuck out a lot to me. The purples you used in that scene looked really nice too. I don't really have anything negative to say about the cartoon honestly, other than the fact that it's a video-game parody--but, ya made it work. There were some jokes in there that made me chuckle and that's a lot better than what most parodies do for me so there's that. Overall this was really solid and ya did a NICE JOB YEA
Thanks a bunch, yo! I appreciate it! And I do have a lot of original episodic type stuff planned for the near future, but I'd rather build up to them with little shorts and parody type shit first so it doesn't feel like a waste. Couldn't hurt!
I usually don't spill my thoughts if I feel this way about a cartoon, but seeing this at four stars with no genuine critique in the reviews section makes me kinda feel like I have to.
My main problem with this lies in the writing-- everything about this cartoon is incredibly derivative. I'm not an expert at comedy writing, but like, come on dude. The whole "fat guy behind a computer" bit's been done to death, and I thought that was pretty much an agreed upon fact among animators nowadays. More importantly, though, are the silly voice and the wacky faces making up 99% of what's "funny" about the cartoon. That's not humor dude. You can't just substitute that in lieu of writing actual jokes. I know it's the go-to critique for those who don't know shit about flash animation to dismiss something for being "too much like hellbenders/pebbles/oney", but honestly, that's what it feels like here. It feels like you're taking a lot of influence from popular flash animators, but nothing about this cartoon really feels unique and it doesn't feel like you really made anything your own. Whereas they're all doing their own thing, it seems like you're just trying to imitate and emulate what you're seeing come out from them. I could be entirely wrong, but that's how it comes off. I will admit though that the visual gags "red is a good color" and the other one about "it's dark and lonely in here" were funny, I liked those.
The animation seemed solid enough but the lineart was kinda distracting. That's really my only qualm with the visuals.
I see this is the only thing you have uploaded, so assuming that you started recently I will say I think you've got potential. You just gotta put more thought into what you're writing. Using something as inspiration is good, but flat-out rehashing is not.
Hope that helps, and hope I wasn't too harsh, I don't like having to be "THE BAD GUY"
I'm not offended in the slightest! This review was really much needed for me and its awesome coming from someone like yourself whose work I really admire. But yes I'm aware there isn't much of a story other than trying to make fun of click bait sites, but I tried to put more of an emphasis on animation quality on this one considering it's for NATA. Seriously, thanks for the awesome review though- I'll try to fix a number of these things as I make more animations.
it's me jon, i'm here to give the jon seal of approval on this josh video
yes!!
God DAMN, Howard. This is really fucking impressive, especially considering the amount of time you had to do this in. All of this-- from the angles and shot choice, character animation, colors, and etcetera all looks fantastic. Great work!
Thank you man! It was a tight squeeze to churn out all of those backgrounds as well as the animation and stuff. I don't think I gave you my reaction to your animation. I will write a review now!
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